Poem

I love the ocean breeze that gives me please,
I walk through the sand, virgin margarita in my hand.
The sun soaks my skin so well,
The beach has a very amazing smell.
The sky looks so blue in the sky,
Trust me, I would never lie.
So many fish swimming through the sea,
I sit under an umbrella with a cup of tea.
I love the beach ever so much,
I love my beach beach beach beach beach.

     I used Assonance, Alliteration, and Internal Rhyme. In line one I used internal rhyme to give the reader a sense of entertainment as an introduction. In line 3 I used alliteration to give a catchy vibe to the poem. At the end I added assonance to add a mark at the end of the poem so people will remember the poem and my main message.

Comments

  1. serynMarch 12, 2018 at 5:28 PM

    I like the rhyme scheme you used! I also love the beach. Good job

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  2. EvanJ's English1 Blog2March 14, 2018 at 6:37 AM

    The AABBCCDDEE rhyme scheme that you used supports the overall meter of your poem. Also, all of the poetry techniques that you used appear to belong, which creates en Euphony through the entirety of the poem. All in all, it is a lovely poem.

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  3. ThomasMarch 15, 2018 at 9:42 AM

    I like your rhyme scheme. I like how you put an exclamation point on the poem by using assonance with the word beach.

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